I've read both recent installations, but I couldn't comment earlier. What could I say? Good job? Amazing writing? True words, but they didn't feel right. The last chapter was incredibly emotional, and it created a cliffhanger that left me speechless. Or (I guess the more appropiate term would be), comment-less.
I'm not a strong D/H or G/H shipper, so this story is extremely painful for me. I want them both to be happy. At this point, the story seems to have really focused on Ginny's thoughts, and so I'm pulling for her more atm (though she's clearly lost). But besides for a short handful of sentences, we don't know what happened to Harry and Draco to create that attraction. I'm sure the explaination will come soon, and then I'll be rooting for my boy (Draco!).
I love music for the chapters. You pick these songs so well.
I guess my only criticism is how much insight the reader gets into the character's thoughts. Funny, since I am usually quite heavy on the internal dialogue myself. I just feel that the external description of Ginny breaking down in the sitting room could have standed alone. I think the scene could have been more powerful without the reader knowing exactly what she was thinking. Of course, this is only one person's opinion. But I feel that such intimate knowledge of her thoughts cheapens her strife. It doesn't sit well with me, I can't really explain why. I guess I would like a bit more mystery about her sacrifice. Hmm, thinking about it now I guess that would make her more OOC. She's never really been focused on in the books, and to see her so well seems to remove that layer of mystery that surrounds her and makes her so popular (with both fans and the Gryffindor boys!)
Positive: I guess part I of your plot is winding down. I'm excited to see the next set of plots, and I am praying for Hermione's safe entrance into the castle! Trust me, I am quite fearful! Hermione, a death eater, and Seamus? What would happen to Blaise if he... OH I can't even say it! (haha)
Great chapter. And thanks for the speedy update!
(P.S. I kinda wish Ron lived. For Ginny's sake. And well, in fanfiction, Ron gets the short end of the stick...alot. Poor guy)
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Date: 2007-05-18 10:54 pm (UTC)From:I'm not a strong D/H or G/H shipper, so this story is extremely painful for me. I want them both to be happy. At this point, the story seems to have really focused on Ginny's thoughts, and so I'm pulling for her more atm (though she's clearly lost). But besides for a short handful of sentences, we don't know what happened to Harry and Draco to create that attraction. I'm sure the explaination will come soon, and then I'll be rooting for my boy (Draco!).
I love music for the chapters. You pick these songs so well.
I guess my only criticism is how much insight the reader gets into the character's thoughts. Funny, since I am usually quite heavy on the internal dialogue myself. I just feel that the external description of Ginny breaking down in the sitting room could have standed alone. I think the scene could have been more powerful without the reader knowing exactly what she was thinking. Of course, this is only one person's opinion. But I feel that such intimate knowledge of her thoughts cheapens her strife. It doesn't sit well with me, I can't really explain why. I guess I would like a bit more mystery about her sacrifice. Hmm, thinking about it now I guess that would make her more OOC. She's never really been focused on in the books, and to see her so well seems to remove that layer of mystery that surrounds her and makes her so popular (with both fans and the Gryffindor boys!)
Positive: I guess part I of your plot is winding down. I'm excited to see the next set of plots, and I am praying for Hermione's safe entrance into the castle! Trust me, I am quite fearful! Hermione, a death eater, and Seamus? What would happen to Blaise if he... OH I can't even say it! (haha)
Great chapter. And thanks for the speedy update!
(P.S. I kinda wish Ron lived. For Ginny's sake. And well, in fanfiction, Ron gets the short end of the stick...alot. Poor guy)