Yeah, you almost make it seem like there are worse ways to go. You know that don't you?
But good job of doing the whole, life flashing before her eyes thing without having it come off as major camp. I mean it might not have worked, but the sort of disjointed style, the jumping around, the sometimes not knowing sure what the hell or where the hell in time you are as a reader, it worked.
This is a very green story. You use green in a lot of different ways. I like that. It's cool. That's about as good as I can express that because it's so freaking late it's early and why isn't my butt in bed yet? No clue. But tomorrow is my day off so, whatever.
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Re: Always meant to read this one, never got around to it.
Date: 2004-10-15 02:47 am (UTC)From:But good job of doing the whole, life flashing before her eyes thing without having it come off as major camp. I mean it might not have worked, but the sort of disjointed style, the jumping around, the sometimes not knowing sure what the hell or where the hell in time you are as a reader, it worked.
This is a very green story. You use green in a lot of different ways. I like that. It's cool. That's about as good as I can express that because it's so freaking late it's early and why isn't my butt in bed yet? No clue. But tomorrow is my day off so, whatever.
So, I'm shoving off now.