We're shown so much in this chapter and we come so close to getting to the centre on so much more. But you like to leave us slavering for more, don't you? Just a little bit, at least. ;)
I love your theory of magic and the history of charms. I love that Draco seems to accept the book's rendering of the unforgivables as monstrous and twisted. What are the two books?
I don’t think Slytherin House has a portrait hole. In CoS, I think JKR describes it as a blank stretch of wall.
he’d ever wanted in his entire selfish shackled I think perhaps this sentence takes a comma between “selfish” and “shackled.” I love how you’re letting Draco become self aware gradually. You’re playing out his changes in exactly the manner that Dumbledore told Harry that people change.
body heat build fingers fingers kneading no breath lemonsweet The physical, yearning language bereft of the buffer that grammar builds up, works extremely well. Draco’s confusion, his unconscious and/or physical desires, his sence memory sends him travelling down paths that he can not control. You’ve conveyed that really well.
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Date: 2005-01-27 06:40 am (UTC)From:I love your theory of magic and the history of charms. I love that Draco seems to accept the book's rendering of the unforgivables as monstrous and twisted. What are the two books?
I don’t think Slytherin House has a portrait hole. In CoS, I think JKR describes it as a blank stretch of wall.
he’d ever wanted in his entire selfish shackled
I think perhaps this sentence takes a comma between “selfish” and “shackled.” I love how you’re letting Draco become self aware gradually. You’re playing out his changes in exactly the manner that Dumbledore told Harry that people change.
body heat build fingers fingers kneading no breath lemonsweet
The physical, yearning language bereft of the buffer that grammar builds up, works extremely well. Draco’s confusion, his unconscious and/or physical desires, his sence memory sends him travelling down paths that he can not control. You’ve conveyed that really well.
I'm shivering...with anticipation!