Right, so first off, I just want you to know that I do not read het in Potterverse. But for you, I made an exception. So I don't know exactly how useful this review will be, mostly because I don't really connect with the characters in this (because we all know just what characters I do connect with!). That being said, here goes.
I liked this first part. ('cept for the icky het at the end, but well, there's no getting around that!) I thought it was well written and you managed to take the cliche of tutoring and have it be different. (And I really like that it seems Millicent doesn't even need tutoring.) I like Dean as well, he's a really nice guy, and Blaise is such a prick! I'm gussing there's going to be a lot more to that in part two?
I'm not sure about the Snape bit, he just seems a little off to me. I think it's because he really does praise Dean highly, disgusted tone of voice or not. In my head, Snape uses words like adequate, passable, and 'you'll do' when talking about the Gryffindors. (I so so so hate saying anything critical, 'specially since you've been so nice and haven't ripped me a new one for that horrible piece of work of mine on ff.net, but I know I love it when people give me good crit, so I'm trying, and ignore me if you want!!)
I'm actually liking Millicent more than I thought I would too. Partly because she's really tall. Like me. :) Okay, so that's not the only reason. She's like how I think a lot of the Slytherins are around each other. More open, and funny, and strong and smart. Only she's being that around Dean as well. It's nice.
(Is it really bad that I noticed every single part about Draco and how he's like the godfather of Slytherin which is really really sexy even though he doesn't though this story isn't about him?)
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Date: 2004-09-02 05:42 pm (UTC)From:I liked this first part. ('cept for the icky het at the end, but well, there's no getting around that!) I thought it was well written and you managed to take the cliche of tutoring and have it be different. (And I really like that it seems Millicent doesn't even need tutoring.) I like Dean as well, he's a really nice guy, and Blaise is such a prick! I'm gussing there's going to be a lot more to that in part two?
I'm not sure about the Snape bit, he just seems a little off to me. I think it's because he really does praise Dean highly, disgusted tone of voice or not. In my head, Snape uses words like adequate, passable, and 'you'll do' when talking about the Gryffindors. (I so so so hate saying anything critical, 'specially since you've been so nice and haven't ripped me a new one for that horrible piece of work of mine on ff.net, but I know I love it when people give me good crit, so I'm trying, and ignore me if you want!!)
I'm actually liking Millicent more than I thought I would too. Partly because she's really tall. Like me. :) Okay, so that's not the only reason. She's like how I think a lot of the Slytherins are around each other. More open, and funny, and strong and smart. Only she's being that around Dean as well. It's nice.
(Is it really bad that I noticed every single part about Draco and how he's like the godfather of Slytherin which is really really sexy even though he doesn't though this story isn't about him?)